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=Suzanno is currently writing on a fiction that will include my characters Peryl and Cealash and his characters Ixogod and Veniro. These will act as the "protagonists". Veniro was actually given to me as a inspirational thing but I did not use him for anything so I still see him as =Suzanno's character.

The antagonists can be viewed here: [link]

Peryl and Cealash are owned by se05239.
Veniro and Ixogod are owned by :iconsuzanno:

Critiques


:iconskillyaslig:
Hello, mine friend :lol: I see you have made another picture with your odd-eyed monsters, eh?

I like how Cealeash's long back tentacles, how they are all curling and weaving about, which helps reinforce the fact that if need be he could strangle you with them. (Well, I'm not so sure that he does that, or maybe he uses them as extra arms in cases of haste, like Spring Cleaning.)

Also, the contrast of his white trousers, and white hair stands out very much, as the rest of the characters have quite drab colourations, so Cealeash stands out considerably.
His eye colour = :heart:

Peryl still reminds me of some savage, intelligent beast, with his hunched over form, and his hands being held like that. Still, as I had said before, his green eyes in contrast with his pitch black hair, and eye pits are awesome. :D

Veniro is also very nice, what with the symbols along his cloak, which have a glowing effect, which stand in contrast with the blackness. The sames goes for Ixogon, which his silver zip, and orange head-band and eyes.


However, Peryls feet irritate me a bit, as they seem very flat with no creases, or marks within them. If you added wrinkles around his toes, and his dominate claw, it would help give his feet a more 3D look.

The same goes with Cealeash's tentacles. If you added creases at the point where the limbs turn (I see you have already added some faint lines) it would make them seem more natural.

With Ixogod if you added folds and ridges around his cloak, to make it seem more like material, it would help. Also, if you tried some different ways of shading/colouring in the clothes, like getting more jagged edged brushes, it would add the texture.

And with Veniro if you added metalized shines to his guns, to help reinforce the material from which they are made.

Other then that, very nice :love:
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:iconspuderific:
I think Peryl looks the coolest and creepiest of these 4

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:iconsuzanno:
Hmmm, 'Man in Black' :D
You said for me to point the flaws right?
Well, Ixogod' eyes are black and his hair is longer (shoulder height)
Other than those two thingies, What can I say, now I'm motivated to start writing it :)

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If it doesn't kill you, it makes you stronger.
But if it kills you, you're dead... lol

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Don't worry... Everything shall be alright...
:iconse05239:
Black eyes? On some drawings others have made they are orange.

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I'm writing what I'm thinking. You'll just have to live with that.
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Insanity is the ability to see the truth behind the lies. Since people can't handle the truth, they lock us up... control us... makes us believe... lies...
:iconsuzanno:
:?
I don't remember such drawing, can you give me a link?

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If it doesn't kill you, it makes you stronger.
But if it kills you, you're dead... lol

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Don't worry... Everything shall be alright...
:iconse05239:
[link]
That looks pretty orange to me.

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I'm writing what I'm thinking. You'll just have to live with that.
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Insanity is the ability to see the truth behind the lies. Since people can't handle the truth, they lock us up... control us... makes us believe... lies...
:iconsuzanno:
Ahh, that was her mistake.
You should have bothered and read the coments

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If it doesn't kill you, it makes you stronger.
But if it kills you, you're dead... lol

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Don't worry... Everything shall be alright...
:iconhex535:
Peryl!!! My FAVE!!!!!

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Takka boojee-bu
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:iconse05239:
Ah. Well. In my own opinion, colored eyes fit more than black. Want me to change it?

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I'm writing what I'm thinking. You'll just have to live with that.
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Insanity is the ability to see the truth behind the lies. Since people can't handle the truth, they lock us up... control us... makes us believe... lies...
:iconsuzanno:
Nah, its ok
I have so many versions of Ixogod already that I can take another one

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If it doesn't kill you, it makes you stronger.
But if it kills you, you're dead... lol

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Don't worry... Everything shall be alright...

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